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The Mist 6/6 
1st-Apr-2010 09:58 pm
Chlayne---Chloe/Wayne Jessup
Title: The Mist
AU Sequel To: The Cave
Characters/Pairings: Some Chloe/Private Wayne Jessup, Lois, The Mist Cast
Fandoms: Smallville/The Mist (brief mentions of The cave)
Rating: T-M (for violence)
Disclaimer: Don't own anything
Summary: After Jack's death, in an effort to get her cousin to start to live again, Lois and Chloe go on a vacation. Of COURSE their vacation spot would suddenly get targeted by some unnatural evil. At least there's a cute guy.
This is an AU sequel to the story "The Cave". The OFFICIAL sequel, "The Pyramid" is already posted and can be found HERE. This two different sequels take place in two different universes that branch off in different directions after the events of The Cave.
Written for my Paranormal25 150 Prompt Table. Prompt of the day # 103: Berserker.
Berserk/Berserker: To be seized by a trance-like, uncontrollable rage characterized by incredible strength and a frightening lust for carnage. The term is derived from the Old Norse word for a common type of mercenary warrior among the Vikings

Chloe shook Lois softly, waking her cousin. "It's dawn."

Lois nodded and yawned, stretching.

David, Stacy and Billy were standing there with Irene, Dan, Bud, Ambrose Cornell, Joe, Bobby, and Wayne, all talking in whispers over the sleeping people, readying for the escape.

Ollie made his way over to them. "Okay. I got the groceries in check-out stand number two. Five bags. We can grab 'em and get out of the door."

"Okay." Chloe nodded, looking at her group. "The Chevy's parked in the center lane of the parking lot, close to the doors. Whoever gets there first open up the doors and we'll all pile in as fast as we can. It'll be a bit jumbled up with all of us plus the groceries, but its only until we make it to Mr. Cornell's truck, where he, Joe, Bobby and Dan are going to get into the truck and join us." She passed Dan one of the walkie talkies she'd been playing around with while the others had slept. "We'll keep in contact with these."

Dan nodded, taking it and placing it in his pants' waistband.

"I just hope Bandana Man dropped my keys somewhere there on the ground." Mr. Cornell whispered.

"Don't matter." Bobby announced, lifting a wire hanger. "I can use this to unlock the doors."

"And I know how to hotwire." Joe finished.

The people looked at the brothers in surprise.

"Great." Chloe smiled. "Let's get the hell out of here."

Lois grabbed her crowbar and stood, following the armed group as they tiptoed amongst the sleeping people, heading towards the check out counter Ollie had told them he'd hidden the supplies.

There was nothing.

Chloe frowned, looking up to see Carmody sitting in a chair, holding a knife in her hands.

"Stealing food now?" The older woman asked.

"We're leaving now." Chloe stepped out from behind the counter. "Stand aside."

"You can't go." Mrs. Carmody replied. "I won't let you."

"You won't let me?" Chloe tried out the word on her tongue and didn't like it.

"It's against God's will." Mrs. Carmody announced as if this should be obvious. "Don't you know that by now? Haven't I proven it again and again? Haven't I shown that I am His Vessel? Why won't you of all people, acknowledge it?"

People started surrounding them, wielding knives and other weapons.

Stacy hugged Billy to her heart.

"Listen here, I'm sick of your shit!" Chloe snapped, eyes golding gold. "Step aside or I'll kill you!"

"You might, but one of my followers will kill some of your group before you can touch me." Mrs. Carmody nodded. "Can you sacrifice their lives that easily? The child's life that easily?"

Chloe's eyes widened. "You're threatening a child?" She shook her head. "I don't know what god you worship, but He ain't the same one I know."

"What's the matter with you?" Mrs. Carmody stood, turning to look at her still outnumbering followers. "You heard him." She pointed in Wayne's direction. "It is these people who brought this upon us. They who refuse to bend to the will of God. And claim it privilege. Sinners. And Pride. Yes. Haughty. Privileged! They mock us, they mock our god our faith our values, our very lifestyle. They mock our humility, our piousness. They piss on us, and laugh!"

The people began to grow uneasy once again, listening to her poisonous words.

Someone sharpened two knives against each other.

"It's from them the blood of human sacrifice. From them the blood of expiation must come."

"You try it!" David snapped as everyone raised their weapons. "You fucking try it!"

"We want," Mrs. Carmody turned to point the knife at Chloe. "The fallen angel."

"No fucking way!" Lois snapped, raising her crowbar.

"We want the fallen angel!" Mrs. Carmody screamed. "Like Christ had to die to save us from our sins, so must another celestial being die! Her blood must be poured upon all of us to save us from the wrath of God! We need to bathe in her blood and let it purify us! Heal us of our human iniquities! Make us new! Make us more in HIS image!"



"His Image!"

"You all are insane!" Chloe snapped. "I'm not an angel!"

Someone in the background began to sing the hymn "Power In The Blood". A couple of the women picked up and joined in.

"Give us the girl!" One of the men reached for her but jerked away when Wayne swiped at him with his tire iron.

"Give us the fallen one!"

The people surged forwards, this time at Chloe.

Her friends tried to encircle her, beating at the people who tried to come at her, but there were just too many.

"Grab her! Grab her!" Carmody screamed. "Kill 'em! Kill 'em all!"

Suddenly a crowbar flew through the air, and like a can of peas of ole, collided with Mrs. Carmody's skull, the force of the blow sending the self-proclaimed prophetess to the ground. Blood gushed from the wound in her forehead, as her body began to twitch.

The people pulled away, scared an disoriented at the fact that their leader, their supposed Vessel of God, the woman they were nearly sure couldn't be hurt, was twitching on the ground.

Chloe watched as Lois pushed through the crowd and bent to pick up her crowbar.

The brunette tightened her hold on the weapon and looked down at the fallen woman. "Didn't see that coming, did you you psycho bitch?" And with that she brought down the crowbar once more, a sickening crack echoing throughout the store, tinted with the horrified screams of Mrs. Carmody's followers. Lois raised the bloody crowbar and screamed as she brought it down again and again and again until the body at her feet was deadly still, blood coating the crowbar and covering Lois from where it'd spurted up on her. "Anyone else feel the need to sacrifice my cousin?"

There was silence.

People backed away.

She sneered before turning to Chloe. "Let's go."

Chloe had never seen that cold look in her cousin's eyes, and she felt sorry, knowing that because of this, something in her cousin had died as well.

The blonde nodded before turning to the people she'd tried protecting since the beginning, the same people who would have murdered her on the whim of a madwoman. "Where are our grocery bags?"

There was silence.

And then Jim and Myron motioned to the number four check-out counter.

The men from her group went and got the bags, except for David, who would be carrying his son during the run.

When they were ready, Chloe turned to them, standing by the door. "Everyone, stay close to each other, maintain visual, and once we get outside, run as if hell were on your tails."

Her group nodded, and as one, they hurried out into the mist, not even noticing that the bodies that'd been thrown out the night before were now completely gone.

Chloe let her beast out, her golden eyes going feline, sensing the creatures in the mist, and knowing that they were gaining on them. "Hurry up people! Hurry up!"

"Daddy!" Billy cried into his father's shirt.

"Everything's going to be alright, Bill." David whispered as they hurried along.

Lois reached the Chevy first and opened the doors in time for David, Stacy, Billy and Bobby to rush in, hurrying to the back. Wayne, Ollie, Irene, Mr. Cornell and Bud were the next in, hurrying inside. Each passing their grocery bags to David to put behind him in the trunk.

Chloe looked up. "Close the doors!"

Despite having friends outside, they did as told.

Chloe swung her ax up in time for a large creature to jump at her, impaling itself on the blade, its deadweight sending her to the ground.

"Chloe!" Lois screamed from inside of the Chevy, pulling out, cocking the gun now in her hand.

"I'm...fine..." Chloe grunted. "Dan...Joe...find them!"

"Are you sure?"

There was a scream in the mist.

"Go!" Chloe continued to grunt as she tried to push off the creature from on top of her.

It only then occurred to Chloe that she'd sent her cousin into an extremely dangerous situation completely blind.

A door opened and closed.

"Get back inside!" She snapped to whoever had been stupid enough to leave the relative shelter of the Chevy.

"Just accept help for once without complaining and just say thank you!" Wayne snapped back at her, voice strained, as he finally managed to push the large, heavy creature from off of her before offering his hand.

She accepted the hand and the help standing.

Gunshots rang through the air.

"Get back inside of the car and turn on the lights. We're going to need it to be able to get back to you all." Stepping down on the creature, she grabbed the ax and yanked it out, guts flying. She paused, then pressed up on her tiptoes and pressed a kiss to his cheek. "Thank you." And with that she rushed off in the direction of the shrieks.

She twirled the ax in her hand and then tightened her grip, narrowing her eyes as she made her way through the thick, wet mist. "LOIS?"



Still nothing.

Worry began to eat at her as she continued forwards, every yell giving away her location to anything around.


Something grabbed her leg and yanked, causing the unprepared blonde to fall and hit the cement, hard. She rolled around, about to impale the ax into whatever had her, when she realized it was Lois.

Who had a finger to her lips.

She was under one of the trucks, Dan and Joe hiding there next to her.

Chloe hurried under as well and just in time, because something large passed by where she'd been just seconds ago.

Something really large.

Her eyes widened.

Lois nodded.

They waited in silence for it to pass by, and only after it wasn't visible, they turned to each other, whispering. "We have to get to the Chevy."

Lois frowned. "Dan hurt his ankle."

"Distraction?" Chloe asked Lois.

"That's what I was thinking." She admitted.

"You girls don't put yourselves in danger because of me, I've lived my life." Dan whispered. "Just leave me here and---."

"That's enough." Chloe narrowed her eyes. "We're going to get you out of here alive with us, you got that?"

He smiled at her thankfully. Despite his brave words it was only human to want to survive.

Chloe turned to Joe. "Lois and I are going to make a distraction for whatever's out there." She took in a deep breath. "And then we're going to make a run for Cornell's truck."

"That's insane!" Joe hissed. "Cornell's truck is in the far back of the parking lot! And we don't even know what Bandana Man did with the keys!"

"It's our only option." Lois hissed back. "They'll be on our tails, so we can't double back towards the Chevy."

Joe and Dan shared uneasy looks.

Chloe passed Joe the ax. "Here. Dan and your lives depend on you now."

He tightened his hand around the weapon and gulped.

The cousins then shared a look and waited a moment before rolling out from under the truck and racing towards the direction of the truck.

Lois fired a shot in the air.

"COME AND GET IT YOU FREAKS!" Chloe screamed, banging cars hoods with her fists as they raced by.

Something jumped onto one of the cars behind them.

The cousins shared looks and pressed on harder.

"Why...do I feel...like Timon and Pumba...from the Lion King?" Lois huffed as she ran side by side with her cousin, the sound of things jumping onto cars close behind them nearly deafening.

Chloe burst into laughter, nearly tripping, before stabilizing her balance and pushing on. "Except we're not in drag."

A little heartened by this exchange, the girls hurried on.

Chloe breathed in and out, thanking all holy that after escaping the cave she'd been true to her word and had trained with Lois night and day. Not only had it strengthened her unused muscles, but it'd kept her monster stronger and happy and content, since it was an active creature by nature. She was stronger, faster, and able to handle this hard physical strain when before she would have collapsed in exhaustion already.

A vague shadow appeared in Chloe's peripheral vision.

"Lois! Nine o'clock!"

Without stopping, Lois turned and fired a shot, the force sending the creature that'd been jumping at her flying back into a car, activating its alarm system.

"There! That's Cornell's truck!" Chloe pointed to the vague impression of a truck some distance away.

"How can you tell?" Lois sounded a little out of breath.

"It smells like the blood on the rope." Chloe responded.

"Yay super smelling."

There was no more talking until they reached the truck, colliding into it as they slid on the ground. Chloe tried to doors. Locked.

"Where are they keys?" Lois asked, training her gun on the mist all around them, as the sound of the creatures coming closer caused their hearts to race from terror. "Where are the keys?!?"

"I'm looking!" Chloe screamed back, checking the the keyholes of both side before sniffing and dropping to the ground, smirking when she saw the bloody keys under the vehicle.

Bandana Man must have dropped them when he'd been nabbed.

Lois shot, a shriek fill the air. "Hurry up! I don't have an unending amount of ammo on me you know!"

"Got them!" Chloe raced to the driver's side and unlocked it, all the locks opening. "Get inside!"

Shooting at another creature as it jumped at her, Lois blew its head off before hurrying to the passenger's side and sliding in, slamming the door shut in time for Chloe to lower her lock, locking the whole truck.

The blonde turned the keys in the ignition and turned on the lights, showing a larger creature standing in front of them, mouth open and fangs showing.

Chloe grinned before pressing down on the gas, shooting into the creature and running over it. "Yeehaw!"

The cousins shared a grin, turning on the road in time to see the lights of the Chevy behind them, as the Chevy Tahoe ran over another creature that'd been trailing the girls.

"Do you think Dan and Joe made it?" Chloe whispered, giving the rearview mirror a quick glance before returning her attention to what was ahead.

Lois turned in the seat and looked out of the back window. "They're sticking out your ax from the front passengers window! They made it!"

Chloe grinned and exited the parking lot onto the main road.

Well, the escape hadn't gone as planned, but at least they'd made it without a casualty.

"Where are we going?" Lois asked, righting herself in the seat and strapping in her seatbelt.

"We just have one stop before we head the hell out of here." Chloe responded, eyes on the road.

"Really? Where's that?"

"Shorm Road."


They drove all day before finding a shelter before sunset in a town outside of Portland, in a mechanical garage. After making sure that the place was properly sealed, Lois had gone about looking at the different materials in the large garage and at the cars that had been left there by their unfortunate owners.

They'd driven through town after town of abandoned cobwebs, and had had to stop the cars and try to remain silent as large creatures roamed above them. Throughout the whole situation they'd had to be vigilant, had searched for any signs of people alive, but there was nothing.

It was as if the rest of the world was dead.

"I can use these material and make shields for the windows and back and front windshields." Lois was saying, looking at a pile of grills. "I could also reinforce the locks, make it safer for us to stop and sleep on the road if we have no other choice."

"You know how to do all that?" Joe asked, obviously impressed.

"Course." She smiled, hands on her hips. "I was an army brat, when girls were playing with their Barbies I was learning how to shoot, how to kick butt, and how to work on engines. When girls were getting pimples and talking about about makeup, I was learning how to assemble my favorite guns in under five minutes, how to drink Russian Generals under the table, and how to pimp my ride Apocalypse style just in case." She grinned. "The General had a panic room built in his home just in case the world came to an end and everything, so I was taught how to survive it should the end of the world come. Be it by zombies or killer robots from the future or vial outbreak or aliens."

"What did you learn during your college years?" Bobby asked, just as impressed as his brother and maybe just a little infatuated.

Lois only answered by pulling down the back of the waistband of her pants to show a tattoo of tribal wings. "I can legally fly a small personal plane, a commercial airline, any military aircraft, a jet, and helicopter. Got this to commemorate."

"I think I'm in love." Bobby turned to his brother.

Joe just nodded in agreement.

"Hey." Chloe sat down next to Wayne, sitting with their backs against the wall. "How are you holding up?"

"I kinda figured they wouldn't have made it." Wayne didn't look at her, eyes on his shoes. "But I guess, deep down inside, that I always kinda had a little hope that somehow they'd made it."

"I'm sorry." She whispered, placing a hand on his arm. "I really am."

"I know." He nodded, placing a hand on hers, tightening his grip slightly.

"Daddy, are we safe now?" Billy asked from where he way lying on the floor between his mother and father.

"We soon will be." David promised his son before giving his wife a look.

Irene, Ambrose Cornell and Dan were talking in the corner.

Bud and Ollie were arguing good-naturedly.

Chloe took in a deep breath before looking at the cars and standing up, going to her cousin. "You've looked over these things, right? You think you can get them running with what we have on us in the store?"

"Yeah, mostly they need the basics, things I can fix with duct tape." Lois nodded.

Then again, Lois swore most things in life could be fixed with duct tape.

"How about the RV and the Land Rover?" Chloe asked, pointing to the vehicles in mention. "We could keep the perishables in the fridge of the RV, and there will be a bathroom even if we're on the road, and a shower that can be used. Also, not only will it keep us from being too smashed up together, but we'll be able to carry more weapons and ammunition that way between us, more gas too."

"Gas and ammunitions." Lois raised an eyebrow. "Curious, we don't have any of those."

"Right, we don't." Chloe nodded. "I noticed as we drove in that there's not only a gas station close to here, but that there's a weapons store as well. So I was thinking I would go, round us up a couple of large gas containers, fill them up, and get us some more weapons and ammunitions from the store. We don't know how far this mist has gotten to if it even has a boundary line. We need to have enough weapons and ammo to protect ourselves."

"You're really insane if you think I'm going to let you do that by yourself." Lois glared at her.

"You can't come." Chloe sighed. "You have to 'pimp' out the rides, remember?"

"Then take Bobby and Joe with you." Lois tried.

Chloe shook her head. "You need their help to be able to finish this quickly."

Plus, if she took the brothers with her, they'd most probably end up dead.

"I'll go with her." Wayne appeared by Chloe's side.

"Me too." David called from where he was lying down.

"And me." Ollie nodded.

"This will be dangerous." The blonde warned them.

"When isn't anything dangerous these days?" Bud grumbled.

"Not only...I'm not referring only to the things." She took in a breath and leaned against the truck. "I mean I might become dangerous...if I feel threatened." There was silence. "You all saw what happened at the supermarket. You saw me...become a monster."

"How exactly does that happen?" Dan asked, curious.

"Does it have anything to do with your time in the cave?" Wayne surprised her by asking.

She nodded, sharing a look with Lois before sighing and closing her eyes. "The creatures that hunted us, were actually mutated humans who'd gotten stuck in there during the time of the Cold War."

Stacy and Billy's eyes widened.

"There was a parasite in this new ecosystem, and it mutated all those it infected. Everyone it infected it evolved to better thrive where they lived, and everyone who got infected with this parasite became the monsters. And those...those who were not strong enough to handle the transformation died." She closed her eyes tightly, images of Jack's smiling face flashing before her.

"Why didn't you?" Ollie asked. "I mean, other than the eyes sometimes, you look perfectly human."

"I was already infected with a different parasite." Chloe opened her eyes once more and sighed, running a hand through her hair. "I was infected when I was a kid, and I'd thought that I'd gotten all of it out, but a part of it was still in me all those years, becoming a part of me, not big enough to induce my suicide by looking for an adrenaline rush, but enough to change me, mutate me a bit without my knowledge. So when Briggs left me and Kathryn to be eaten, and I got infected by the creature in the cave, both of the parasites battled and then merged, and I was the outcome."

"Wow." Bud blinked. "That sounds like a movie."

She snorted, amused. "It's not quite as fun living through it, let me tell you. I constantly have a monster in here." She tapped her chest. "Its grumpy and a little sulky, and it has a bloodlust that gets out of control when I feel threatened, or when the few people it considers packmates are put in danger."

"Like when Wayne was stabbed." Irene pointed out.

Chloe nodded, feeling a little embarrassed now that it was let out. "I---I let the monster out of the cage and kinda blanked out, I only really woke up when my hand was inside the butcher's stomach."

Billy made up his nose at the memory.

"So, other than this bloodlust," Ambrose spoke up. "How does this mutation work exactly?"

"Well, I'm stronger than I was before, and I can shift without letting my monster out. When I shift my eyes go gold, like this." She shifted to demonstrate, wincing slightly at the bright light, bringing her hand up to shield her gaze until it got used to the light provided by the generator in the store. "Like this I'm faster, stronger, and all of my senses are heightened, like my eyesight--I can see in the dark. When I let my monster out, my pupils go elliptical, like a cat's. Well, sometimes my eyes go feline-like when my monster's not out, but you can tell when my monster's in charge because there's not a hint of humanity in my eyes...its purely animalistic. And that's when I'm dangerous, because sometimes I blank out completely, and the monster mightn't realize or even remember who is my enemy and who isn't."

"Which is why you approached her so cautiously in the pharmacy." Wayne pointed to Lois.

Lois nodded. "The kitty knows that I'm pack, but sometimes in the heat of bloodlust she can get a little disoriented, so you just have to be calm and soothing and let her get a good whiff of your scent and hear the tone of your voice to recognize you."

"It's a monster." Chloe glared at Lois. "Stop calling it kitty."

"Make me." Lois stuck out her tongue.

"Well, how I see it, your creature has taken to people to take care of." Irene announced. "And you've been taking care of us, so it will soon take to us as pack as well."

"I figured the same." Dan nodded.

"After the people turned on us in the supermarket, it's been...distrustful." Chloe frowned.

"Well, we haven't done anything for it to distrust us." Ambrose replied. "It'll get used to us in time."

Chloe was shocked at how they were taking this.

How could they do so---so easily?

"Hell, Chloe." Ollie gave her a wry smile. "Your monster's been protecting us up until now, why are you so surprised that we're accepting of it?"

"Because I am not half as accepting of it as you all are!" She replied truthfully. "It's---a lot to digest."

"Is there a way to control the Doctor Jeckyl Mister Hide act?" Stacy asked curiously. "To make you more in control when your inner kitty comes out to play?"

"I don't know." Chloe admitted, ignoring the nickname she was hoping wouldn't stick amongst the group. "I mean, the monster is constantly urging me to merge, but I don't know what exactly that means...and if I did...would I lose myself to it if I did merge with it? Would I become the monster? Is my not merging what has kept some of my humanity still intact?"

"We have time to figure that out." Wayne went to lean against the truck next to her. "Don't stress yourself out too much for now."

"You sound like a berserker." Billy announced, causing everyone to look at him in surprise.

"A what, honey?" Stacey asked.

"You know, the intense viking warriors who used to go into a serious bloodlust in battle? Like in the comics dad always gets me." Billy announced, sitting up, excited. "They like, channel the rage of a bear or something, but its like she channels the rage of something feline, 'cause of the eyes and everything. Probably like a lion or tiger or something fierce like that."

Chloe blinked.

She---she'd never thought of that before.

"It does...purr...when its happy." Chloe whispered.

Wayne turned to look at her with an oddly intense expression of fascination on his face.

Once again, for some reason, she felt embarrassed.

"Well, enough of the chitchat." Lois announced. "We should all get a good night's sleep tonight. Tomorrow we all have busy and potentially dangerous days, so we should all get much needed rest."

"I'll take the first watch." Ambrose Cornell called, getting up and grabbing his shotgun.

"I'll take second." David replied.

One by one they got their shifts appointed to them so that everyone would be able to have equal amounts of sleep.

Chloe and Wayne, both having later shifts, laid down, and if it was close to each other that was only coincidental.

Stretching on the ground, Chloe looked at the small group of people, and smiled. Lois could easily whip them into shape, and with a couple of weapons training and such, they might very well be able to survive this...whatever this was.

She still worried about Lex, about the outside world, but Chloe had realized that she needed to worry about them and about now. They were still driving towards Metropolis in hopes that Lex and the others were still alive, but they were in Oregon and it would take a while to drive to Kansas even in the best situations without having to go so slow because of the mist...or killer monsters.

At least Lois had found fog lights and was going to install them on the vehicles.

And they were going to stock up on weapons and ammunitions.

Chloe smiled.

They could make it.

They could.

"Sleep." Wayne whispered, eyes closed. "You need your rest."

"You need your rest." She chuckled, closing her eyes nonetheless.

"Ouch, kitty's got claws." He whispered back teasingly.

She felt his hand find and clasp hers.

The blonde somehow forgot to scold him for picking up Lois' nickname
2nd-Apr-2010 03:42 am (UTC)
Yes crazy lady down, but oh noes for Lois and how this could affect her once she's had time to process.

I love how accepting they all are of her and how much a fear it is to her to be rejected because of how different she is from them.

So does the open-endedness of this mean possible future continuation? *please*

Oh also I like that you didn't go with movie ending concept. I like the book ending much better but that's just the optimist in me.
2nd-Apr-2010 03:49 am (UTC)
Yep, Lois hasn't had time to process it, and it wont be pretty when she does---although shell probably just bottle it up and pretend that it doesn't matter.

I am considering continuing in another story, yes.

What actually intrigued me about the movie was the ending. I hadn't seen one like that before and I was shocked and morbidly impressed...but I try not to do something like that in my own writings. I'm from the 'and they lived happily ever after' generation (damn disney!)
2nd-Apr-2010 04:31 am (UTC)
I seriously hope you'll write another story. Wayne was so, so... Ugh, I wish someone like him existed in my life (without The Mist, of course. Not so fond of killer monsters and whatnot).

Chloe was super cool and Lois... Awesome cousin, if I do say so myself. Killing to protect her family. Wow.
2nd-Apr-2010 04:33 am (UTC)
I will seriously consider writing it. I have two storylines in my head right now, one for each 'verse (the official verse and the AU verse) so you never know what will happen!
2nd-Apr-2010 04:19 pm (UTC)
Really? For BOTH? You just made my inner kitty very happy.. ;)
2nd-Apr-2010 12:08 pm (UTC)
Wow, this was a wicked awesome story and sequel! And the ending.. gosh what a brilliant ending.. evilish cliffhanger though! I loved how well everyone reacted to learning of Chloe's true-self, her inner 'monster'... I have a feeling that Chloe's inner 'kitty' will be thinking of them as pack soon enough. lol.

I am sooo glad that the crazy bitch Mrs. Carmody finally got what was coming to her... Yay, Go Lois! It's scary how much she really believed all that crap she was saying and even scarier were the idiots that believed it along with her. *shivers* Terrifying what fear does and turns people into. It kinda reminds me of the movie "Doomsday" when half the people became crazy religious like Mrs. Carmody and the other half became insane cannibals... God, I love that movie! lol.

The Chloe/Lois relationship in this was simply fabulously written. I just love your Lois, all your Lois' really, she was just badass as Chloe even without 'powers' and a inner animal. I love how much she was willing to do and sacrifice for her cousin... So different than on SV. Great job! I also adored the Chloe/Wayne bits, he's so cute and I'm super happy that she saved him, and again I'm glad that Mrs. Carmody is dead! DIE BITCH! lol.

Anyways, I really enjoyed reading this, it was full of action and suspense and I simply loved it! Thanks for writing! Also if you decide to write a sequel to this I won't be against it. *hint-hint* lol.

2nd-Apr-2010 05:09 pm (UTC)
Yay! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! Yep, Chloe's 'kitty' will be accepting them as a pack, and anyway, Chloe had to realize that they all saw her go 'monster-mode' BEFORE they risked their lives to get into the car with her, and that she even afterwards risked her life with Lois to save Dan and Joe. So everyone had a chance to digest the fact that she was 'different' but that she was 'good' and with her explaining it would make them feel even better about her situation.

I'm glad you enjoy the Chlo-Lo relationship. I just can't imagine them not being that tight, and it comes across in my stories. Plus, I want Chloe to have a strong female friendship and who better than her favorite cousin?

Sequel....am considering!
6th-Apr-2010 01:49 am (UTC)
Awesome story! I have to admit that I was a bit sceptical of this one from the get-go. Having read up on The Mist, I was unconvinced that you could pull off making Stephen King's grusome film paletable, but you managed it in spades! Thanks for making Hollywood better. I also appreciate the subtle undertones of Chlavis. I hope you write a follow up to this one. Thanks again.
6th-Apr-2010 02:26 am (UTC)
Really? Yay! I feel better having read that :D:D
7th-Apr-2010 06:43 am (UTC)
I don't remember if I told you but the Cave/Pyramid series are my favorites so far. I love that you did an AU of my favs! I love the Mist the way you improved it! I saw the movie in theaters and was disappointed by the ending; I am excited that you made it better. You left it open for a sequel just like the Pyramid. I hope you continue on with both of them. Still waiting for the elusive Pitch Black crossover though. *keeps fingers crossed*
7th-Apr-2010 11:58 am (UTC)
Exactly! Its open for a sequel. The elusive IS planned you know ;)
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